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Exercise 4 - Writing specific details in body paragraphs
Instructions: The following paragraph has problems with vague language. The vague phrases
are highlighted. Click on the EDIT PARAGRAPH button and make the necessary changes in the
box provided to make the vague sentences more specific. When finished, click on the DONE button
to compare WHAT YOU WROTE with WHAT WE WROTE. Click on the HINT button for information on
how to improve the sentences.
Our country
has been experiencing problems with its youth. If young people were
required to serve in the military, they would stay out of trouble
and learn good skills that they will use throughout their lives.
My friend who served in the military for four years told me that
military service helped him a lot and taught him many things. Mandatory
military service would not only teach America's young people the
meaning of respect and obligation but it would also provide them
with the self-discipline they lack.
