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Exercise 6 - Identifying and correcting errors in thesis statements



Instructions: Identify and fix the problem with each thesis statement in the following introductory paragraphs.

In Support of the Death Penalty

      One afternoon in 1994, Megan Kanka, a little girl of 7, was riding her bicycle outside her home in New Jersey when a neighbor asked her if she wanted to see his new puppy. He then took her into his home, raped her, and strangled her with a belt. The man, a twice-convicted sex-offender called Jesse Timmendequas, was sentenced to death in 1997. For gruesome murders like this, the death penalty is the only appropriate punishment. Justice is only served when the death penalty is given to a criminal who has cruelly taken the life of another person. Besides, by executing those who murder innocent victims in cold blood, society can prevent future murders. Also, the possibility of executing the innocent by mistake is dramatically reduced by the appeals system that is in place today for defendants in death penalty cases as well as the availability of advanced forensic technology and DNA analysis. Therefore, we should put a stop to executing criminals.

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