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Exercise 9 - Correcting bad concluding sentences in body paragraphs



Instructions: Read the paragraph and type an appropriate concluding sentence in the box.

  Paragraph 4 of 4
      The community notification law concerning sex offenders jeopardizes an offender's opportunity to rehabilitate. Even though there is abundant evidence that not all offenders are equally likely to repeat their crimes, the community's belief that a cure is impossible may become a self-fulfilling prophecy. For example, the public's hostility can alienate sexual offenders and drive them away from seeking or continuing treatment. This can lead to an even worse situation. Released offenders who have served their time and are truly controlling their urges may be irretrievably harmed. The case of Scott Murphy is a clear example. Murphy attends a group therapy session once a week and monitors his own progress daily with his therapists over the phone. In the words of one of his therapists, "He has really done well and presents a minimal risk to the community." Despite his advances in fighting the disease, Murphy believes that community notification will make him relapse. "In the community's eyes," Murphy says, "I'm the scum of the earth. If everyone knows, I'll feel worse about myself. And the reason people re-offend is that they don't feel good about themselves." Mental-health professionals agree that rehabilitation cannot work in such a rejecting environment. Therefore, the community notification law remains one of the most controversial issues in the U.S. criminal justice system.

hint     
Write your concluding sentence here
Done
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