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Exercise 7 - Writing cohesive paragraphs



Instructions: Click on the EDIT PARAGRAPH button to make the necessary changes to create a cohesive paragraph. Click on the HINT button if you need help.

      Required service in the armed forces would create a military made up of members from all walks of life. Minorities and the less privileged are overrepresented in our nation's voluntary military. The privileged class is underrepresented in our nation's voluntary military. Military service is voluntary, and the burden of military service unfairly falls on minority groups and the poor. Minorities make up more than 37% of the military. But they only make up 35% of the population of the United States. African-Americans make up more than 22% of the armed forces personnel. But they make up only 12% of the population nationwide. These racial imbalances put minorities at a greater risk of being killed or injured during times of war. The middle and upper classes have largely avoided military service in the last few decades. All Americans must share the burden and honor of defending America. The mandatory draft of World War II had a democratizing effect on the military and the nation as a whole. A universal draft would create a more cohesive America, with rich and poor, minorities and Whites all serving together.
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